tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3993730603173714821.post8708451707785461229..comments2023-10-06T00:19:37.406-07:00Comments on Be the Planner of your own LIFE!: Application LetterMin Hau Onghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00292353838584119551noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3993730603173714821.post-53577607035253210982010-09-13T11:05:36.619-07:002010-09-13T11:05:36.619-07:00Hi Riyan, Lin Nan and Hong, thanks for your advice...Hi Riyan, Lin Nan and Hong, thanks for your advice. I have edited my application letter according to your comments. :DMin Hau Onghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00292353838584119551noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3993730603173714821.post-79482001148558693232010-09-12T19:42:40.377-07:002010-09-12T19:42:40.377-07:00Hi Hau,
I think you have good application letter ...Hi Hau,<br /><br />I think you have good application letter since you know how to "sell" yourself in some paragraphs to showcase all of your skills which are needed by the employer. Your piece seems to satisfy the first 4C and the 6th C: Clear, Concise, Concrete, Correct and Complete.<br /><br />However, I agree with Nan, you should tone down a bit to show more "Courteous". Moreover, you should link 2 continuous paragraphs to make the whole letter more "Coherent". Your letter seems to contain 4 separate parts.<br /><br />The 4th paragraph (the mathematics student) with problem solving skills, I think that is your strength when applying for a job in a bank. So, it would be better if you move it into the second or third paragraph to catch more attention from the reader at the beginning of the letter.<br /><br />Hope it helps...blue_eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07790065461986751603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3993730603173714821.post-43481544190730199562010-09-06T05:33:25.172-07:002010-09-06T05:33:25.172-07:00Hi Min Hau
I think this is a well writen piece.
Th...Hi Min Hau<br />I think this is a well writen piece.<br />The last C of the seven Cs is couteous. You may want to tone down a bit. It may be better to replacing phrases like "nothing more" etc.<br />Hope my 5 cents helps.<br />NanAshesofwindhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040849044279757876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3993730603173714821.post-69760247249337115822010-09-06T02:58:58.656-07:002010-09-06T02:58:58.656-07:00Hi Min Hau!
I think this is a well written applic...Hi Min Hau!<br /><br />I think this is a well written application letter. However, I have to point out that most application letter have the contacts to be written at the bottom of the letter instead of the beginning.Riyanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12456597575453163605noreply@blogger.com