Sunday, September 5, 2010

Application Letter

DBS Banking Internship

When you become a DBS Intern, you'll get to learn about our business, build your network early and benefit from the diversity of opportunities we have.

The commitment we seek
For at least 8 weeks from May to August or November to December, you will be assigned to either a Business Unit or Service Unit.

Invaluable learning opportunities
You will gain hands-on experience in our business operations and have the opportunity to observe, participate and contribute in meetings and other business events. Throughout your internship, a mentor appointed by the Business/Service Unit will provide you with career coaching, guidance and feedback.

What we need from you
Apply for the DBS Internship if you :
* are currently studying in a university.
* have excellent academic results.
* active extra-curricular records.
* have an innovative and enterprising mind with an international outlook.
* have leadership qualities and good team working ability and communication skills.

September 6, 2010

DBS Bank
6 Shenton Way, DBS Building Tower One
Singapore 068809
1800 111 1111

Dear Sir/Mdm,

I am writing to apply for the internship advertised at If you are looking for an intern who has experienced a hardship whereby trained him to possess leadership qualities and good team-working ability and communication skills, I would be one of the most ideal candidates.

How do I have team-working ability and communication skills? I took part in some activities as mentioned in my resume which required the participants to work as a team for a long time. There were many obstacles which I could only overcome with a persistent belief on “teamwork makes success”. After going through those activities, I have learnt to have effective communication skills to maintain harmonious relationship with team members. I believe that all the skills I have gained from these activities will help me to become an excellent intern in the Business Unit or Service Unit.

As a mathematics student, I have been developing logical thinking and problem solving skills. Besides, with half a year working experience as an office attendant, I am aware of the etiquette to work professionally at workplace which is similar to the Business Unit or Service Unit.

In my point of view, dealing a business relies on how skillful we manage a relationship with people around us while providing satisfying services to a client depends on how efficient we communicate with people. I have been in many activities that provided me opportunities to develop such an ability. With this particular strength in my hands, I will do to my best to contribute to DBS.

Please see my resume for comprehensive information on my personal data.

I can be reached anytime via email at or my cell phone, 9xxxxxxx.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to speaking with you about this internship opportunity.

Ong Min Hau



  1. Hi Min Hau!

    I think this is a well written application letter. However, I have to point out that most application letter have the contacts to be written at the bottom of the letter instead of the beginning.

  2. Hi Min Hau
    I think this is a well writen piece.
    The last C of the seven Cs is couteous. You may want to tone down a bit. It may be better to replacing phrases like "nothing more" etc.
    Hope my 5 cents helps.

  3. Hi Hau,

    I think you have good application letter since you know how to "sell" yourself in some paragraphs to showcase all of your skills which are needed by the employer. Your piece seems to satisfy the first 4C and the 6th C: Clear, Concise, Concrete, Correct and Complete.

    However, I agree with Nan, you should tone down a bit to show more "Courteous". Moreover, you should link 2 continuous paragraphs to make the whole letter more "Coherent". Your letter seems to contain 4 separate parts.

    The 4th paragraph (the mathematics student) with problem solving skills, I think that is your strength when applying for a job in a bank. So, it would be better if you move it into the second or third paragraph to catch more attention from the reader at the beginning of the letter.

    Hope it helps...

  4. Hi Riyan, Lin Nan and Hong, thanks for your advice. I have edited my application letter according to your comments. :D